A poem about the human virus, would you please critique?

December 22nd, 2008

Super-Natural
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Bird on a blast of coke
Clear amid all the smoke
Our mutual gaze slows down time
Pass judgment on friend of foe

Ignorant to secrets you hide
Ignorance and bliss as you fly
Maturing our minds is a crime
When slapped and spat on from high

Curiosity sought evolution
Fungus offered solutions
Awareness, a gained compromise
Gave meaning to good and gruesome

Talk spheres to stick men on paper
Old man takes a child and rapes her
The victims are never the wise
Wake now or be put to sleep later

Empowered when blood is spilled
Demons confused with your guilt
Everything returning full circle
When identical life is built

Adolescent humanity grows
Respect and unity flows
Mother is eternally fertile
As only God and I know

This poem too realistically feels that evrything present is dark and bleak . The present human being a homosapien is a virus who lives and feeds on thers. Is everthing moving towards a precipice ? But here the poet comes to our rescue and says categorically,’ No.’
He says in the last stanza that the adolescent humanity finally grows. A respect for each other and unity comes between all of us ; that we arenot content to be the virus that we were. After all the Mother earth is eternally fertile , she bears the burden of everybody and feeds them . A new direction and impetus is given by God as planned . As was already known to the poet.

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One Response to “A poem about the human virus, would you please critique?”

  1. Srikant J Says:

    This poem too realistically feels that evrything present is dark and bleak . The present human being a homosapien is a virus who lives and feeds on thers. Is everthing moving towards a precipice ? But here the poet comes to our rescue and says categorically,’ No.’
    He says in the last stanza that the adolescent humanity finally grows. A respect for each other and unity comes between all of us ; that we arenot content to be the virus that we were. After all the Mother earth is eternally fertile , she bears the burden of everybody and feeds them . A new direction and impetus is given by God as planned . As was already known to the poet.
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